25 November 2006

English essay for SPM..

QUESTION: Write a story with the ending, "If only I had been more careful, that wouldn't have happened". Your story should not be less than 350 words.

Tonight was a cold and stormy night. The doors slammed shut as the rustling sound of the leaves could be heared. The storm had been like this for the past three days. I sat on my bed thinking if I had upset the Gods above in heaven. As I lay my head down soft and gently on my comfy pillow, I wondered if mom and dad were ok. They had gone for a vacation to the bahamas and I had to stay back because of my exams. I wasn't worried about it as I've stayed alone many times.

Suddenly, the lights went out. My heart raced in agony as the storm got worse. I could see lightning lashing onto my gate and the roaring sound of thunder that came along. I pulled myself together and realised I needed to light some candles. So I headed downstairs with my trusty torchlight and worked my way to the storage room. I found the candles and begun to light them all over the house. I couldn't stand the fact that the darkness was playing games with my mind.

An hour had passed till I realised something wasn't right. I felt as if something else besides me was in the house. I panicked. My mind filled with fear but I had to be sure I was right. So, I searched all the rooms on the same floor and found nothing. So I carefully walked down staircase. As I was walking, I realised all the candles that I had lit were put out. I was surprised but aware that there could be someone else in the house. My mind pondered as to how i was going to sneak around without alerting the possibly dangerous stranger.

Then, it happened. As I hid behind one of the room's doors. I saw someone walk by me. He was a huge muscular guy who wore a beard and had hair that was so curly a fly could get stuck if it went through it. I was puzzled. Why would someone want to break into my house, I asked myself. I noticed the man had a huge revolver on his belt. The same one the cops used. I didn't want to stick around and aak questions. I had to call the cops. So I crept towards the phone and thank God it was still working. I made a distressed call and the cops said they would be at my house in five minutes.

As I crept back upstairs, I accidently knocked over a small lamp and it broke. By this time I knew the stranger had been alerted. I was scared and feared for my life. My fears turned into my worst nightmare as I heard a loud noise. I was shot in the chest. I could feel blood oozing all over my shirt. The stranger walked towards me while mumbling words I just couln't understand. I thought I was a dead man. Then a miracle happened just as the stranger was about to finish me off. I heard a second gunshot and the stranger was down. It was the cops who had arrived.

I was rushed to the hospital and the doctors commenced emergency surgery on me to remove the bullet. I was then transferred to the Intensive Care Unit(ICU) as the bullet had hit my lungs and I was unable to breathe properly. My parents rushed back as soon as they got the news. I was lucky to be alive. The doctor had explained that if the bullet had hit me a bit more to the left , it would have hit my heart and I would be dead. Nobody knew who the stranger was or what he wanted. If only I had been more careful, that wouldn't have happened.


yup..that was my english essay for the second part..lol well till the end of spm i'll write summore kay..


Nish said...

You're good lah!
Kudos to you man!

-daenesh- said...

Why thank you!

marcia fabulous said...

i did the same quezzie!!
except mine was a morbid piece..

-daenesh- said...

haha..ic ic well thanks

leon said...

Brilliant! man,...i learn alot from ur essay =X

Anonymous said...

i really like ur essay:)

btw,ur essay quite same as in my english paper in the past mid-year exam.


Anonymous said...

Kool story bro

Anonymous said...

can u make me a essay for my assignment
"my great vacation at bandung"

Dollah Ar Dam said...

its awesome .
learn a lot from it .

-daenesh- said...

thank you all for your wonderful comments on this post.. i really appreciate it and i'm looking forward to writing more good stuff!

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Anonymous said...

interesting story. but honestly, the title is not suitable for this story. the ending should not end up with those words.

-daenesh- said...

if you read the question of this SPM essay, you would have known that this story had to end with that last sentence.. thanks for reading

naqib said...

Nice essay. Can memorize it for the upcoming exam ( if there is any question wants it ) =) Second last comment, every essays examiners will embrace it. You could write down any essay of incident, but the essay must be related to what the question wanted. I anyway would say the title is suitable for this story. Nice~~ ;)

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